Hi Everyone
This week I've written two poems which both start with the same subject each stanza. Please let me know which is the best one. They are both called "Some beliefs on mine." Ok here it goes
Poem 1
An idea is
a car
rushing at speed
towards its destination.
Clouds are
the unwept tears
of Nature.
Dawn is like
Ayers Rock
glowing on angel's wings.
The heart is
a locked drawer
where I keep my secrets.
Frear is
the cramping of
the calf muscles
of style.
Fish live
in a water wonderland
made of rainbows.
Bitterness is
the mould on top
of our past hurts.
Only truth
can unshackle
the rocky burdens
of my prejudices.
Poem 2
An idea is
a dream
where you
never wake up.
Clouds are
the angels
who watch over the bush.
Dawn is a
chameleon
changing colours.
The heart is
a robber
stealing our
pure intentions
Fear is
the knifing
of the soul.
Fish live
in castles
made of pretty things.
Bitterness is
the newest challenge
to overcome.
Only truth
will set you free
from the bars
of disallusionment.
END
PS Tell me what you think.
